Talk:Teaching Tibet: Pedagogical Theory and Practice, and the Preservation and Education of Tibetan Religion, Culture, History and Politics

Thanks
Thank you so much for posting this. I'll be reading it through as soon as I get the chance! -- Adam Krellenstein 20:38, 14 March 2008 (MST)


 * Hey, be my guest! There's a lot I need to fix with this, and my second chapter has just now gone to committee for revision. Any comments on editing are appreciated...a fresh set of eyes is always welcome. Oh, and I know I say "being that" instead of "since" in here way too much...so be on the lookout. (WillBrideau 11:23, 17 March 2008 (MST))


 * OK. I just finished it, and I really liked it. I'm very impressed with your thoroughness and intellectual rigour. I've also suddenly become interested in Tibet, though I never was before.


 * I have just a few nit-picky comments which you're free to ignore:


 * You call Tibet's history "very unique"; but "unique" is an absolute adjective (like "pregnant"; you can't be "very pregnant"). You might say "very special", instead.
 * I would re-phrase the bit "non-separation of church and state"; it's awkward.
 * I would replace your phrasing "is coming before" with simply the word "precedes".
 * "... most amount of influence ..." is awkward, also.
 * There's an extra word in the excerpt "in any depth in".


 * And that's it! To find the sentences I reference, do an inline search of the text. Be sure to update me when you add more to this page; I'll enjoy reading that too, I expect. -- Adam Krellenstein 20:13, 17 March 2008 (MST)


 * I appreciate that you think I'm thorough and that I have intellectual rigor...and I think everyone should be interested in Tibet, but that's me, and I'm biased.


 * Your edits are definitely appreciated.
 * I eliminated that "non-separation of church and state" in the third round of edits.
 * For some reason, I really love writing in the passive voice, and my Dad points this out to me all the time, then I forget and I start doing it again. I frequently use phrases like "being that" and "is coming before," and it is powerful when you use it sparingly, but that's just it...I don't use it sparingly. So I'm trying to be more vigilant about that as I write...but I think I also need to go back and hunt down some offending phrases. Do I think it's cool, or colloquial or something? I don't know.


 * I'm making headway on the third chapter, but I'm sure there's plenty I need to fix in chapter two. By the by, I think I'm going to rearrange these sections into different pages to break it up a little.


 * Gotta get back to it. No sympathy for the devil.


 * (WillBrideau 22:49, 18 March 2008 (MST))

Como estas
William, como estas??? you are the master of Hampedia!!! (Josehampediaacconut 14:02, 19 March 2008 (MST))


 * Just got revisions back from Alan Hodder for Teaching Tibet: Chapter II, the edits will be up in a couple days. (WillBrideau 16:41, 29 March 2008 (MST))


 * Just put up the new revisions...not too many changes. I also added a little bit to the Introduction, it needed a little more at the end there. (WillBrideau 21:52, 29 March 2008 (MST))

Final Div III is up
Hey, just wanted to let you know that the final version is up now...this is what I'm turning in on Thursday the 24th of April. The Appendices are pretty messed up, but I just don't have the time to go through and fix em all right now. Enjoy! (Wab04 12:53, 22 April 2008 (EDT))